I still vividly remember the moment where I was sitting in that same old situated examination hall, my mind was just plain blank. As I was reading through the passages, several thoughts flashed through my mind as I thought they were going to be some great ideas for me to pen them down later. However, unknowingly to realize, those thoughts just disappear as I moved on to the subsequent paragraphs. And very soon thereafter, I just could not absorb the contents of the passage because my mind was not concentrating at all.
Putting this reflection into place, I figured out what were the problems - hope and concentration. I realized that it was not the very the first time I know beforehand that I was going to mess up the paper, thus giving up hope and led myself to lose concentration in the examination hall. The solution to it is to learn the art of concentration. I perceive the art of concentration is when you are able to do something that allows you to flow in that living moment. At least to me, I know that I have to get this kick off by doing something that I really love and have great passion for it. About a month ago, the stock market has given me those desires and I told myself that it was the path for me. Indeed, for the past month, I have been reading and researching up on stuffs about the stock market without feeling any single bit of a chore. On top of that, I dug deep into my pocket to sign up for a course. Right now, it is almost everyday that I have the urge to look at the stock market and trying to be able to learn as much as I could.
To link the theory back, I realized I was flowing in that living moment where my full concentration just comes naturally each time I look at the market. I know people might think that this works only when you are doing something that you like. Nonetheless, I think that once being able to acquire this art, it is just a matter of choice and mindset - whether you can position yourself to flow in that particular moment. Once that is being achieve, concentration just comes naturally without any bit of distraction.
Having all these being said, I am currently still in the learning process. Nobody can predict the future nor guarantee anything. I am really thankful that I have to do this reflection lest this loser's mindset will continue drag on.
Hey Elson, I'm impressed with your writing skills. You presented the idea in a clear and concise manner. I'm glad that you've found your interest in stock market and even signed up for a course on it. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteHey Elson, the whole reflection flows very well as you make good use of both the connectors and transitions. The organisation of your reflection is good, you've included all three aspects that are needed. To sum up, it is fluent and cohesive!
ReplyDeleteHi Elson, you used a wide range of descriptive words and desmonstrated your thoughts in an organised manner.
ReplyDeleteI can totally relate myself to your situation, i agree that it is really easy to lose focus on certain things but most importantly we still get back on track! :D
Elson,
ReplyDeleteContent and organisation: This is a very good piece of reflective writing. Your ideas are well organised and they flow well from the start to the end. What made it so great was that you reported on your weakness which you identified, and have worked hard to address this problem. You recognised that it is not an easy journey and you have to continue to work at it and improve on your ability to concentrate. Thank you for your honesty. Work hard to achieve your goal. I am sure you will overcome this problem with effort.
Language:
1. Be careful using pronouns. In your sentence, 'there is' is the subject of the sentence. You used 'it' to refer to the subject again.
In fact, 'there is' nothing to ponder over 'it'...
2. Be careful using 'there' vs 'it'.
I was literally holding on to my pen while blankly staring at others busily scribbling on their paper, 'it' was no doubt that I had already given up hope and was prepared to take up the English module.
There refers to a topic in general.
It refers to a specific noun in the sentence.
If you use 'it', you are telling your readers an idea in the earlier part of the sentence gave you doubt.
Do you understand what I am trying to say?
3. Think about the function of the 'situated' examination hall in your sentence. What important meaning does it add to the sentence?
I was sitting in that same old situated examination hall, my mind was just plain blank.
4. Be careful with expressions: What does 'unknowingly to realize' mean?
5. Think about the use of tenses here. Can you spot the error?
... those thoughts just disappear as I moved on to the subsequent paragraphs.
Hi Miss Cook, thank you for your valuable feedback.
Delete2. Yes, I understand the difference when it comes to using 'there' vs 'it'.
3. I used the word 'situated' because I wanted to imply how the examination hall was in the same old situation just like how it has always seemed to be.
4. I thought 'Unknowingly to realize' means something like 'Out of no reason I realized that...'. So I guessed I was wrong. I will check it out on how to use the proper term to say that phrase.
5. Yes, I spotted the error. 'Disappear' should be changed to 'Disappeared'.
Thank you Miss Cook.